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我是想表达，如果法律修改的太快，情况稍微一变就改。那么法律就无法执行了。执法者不熟悉法律，而平民也不熟悉法律，可能就无意中触犯了法律。
# d  q, _5 N6 t6 j# I$ P% {6 xAnonymous 发表于 2009-9-13 22:08

. c' f# I7 \0 GSo, you'd better rephrase them.

prone to be 是揍字数用的

冠词我也改了，等下发上来

Another example:
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Another system to rule the people is    moral system. It is a completely flexible system, in comparison with the legal system.
吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-16 12:33

8 n4 o+ H" ]  z% ~the legal system.这个the应该留下了吧  前文提到过了呀

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Once a rigid and fixed law comes into force, the society can immediately reach a consensus,

In principle, a law comes into force after a consensus has been reached.

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the legal system.这个the应该留下了吧  前文提到过了呀
Anonymous 发表于 2009-9-16 12:40

No. I feel you may have to use "the" in the first place.

) q8 [3 X0 P' R' l; R% X% t. T6 QI am just wondering why you did not forget to use "the" in the second place.

No. I feel you may have to use "the" in the first place.
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; f# }5 a( C3 H6 uI am just wondering why you did not forget to use "the" in the second place.
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因为我的确不重视冠词的使用  用法也不一定清楚
# b  p0 X, U2 ]* y+ I9 M& F冠词在我文章中都是爱写不写的
+ J+ {5 `* E4 t3 ?9 Z& ]0 d9 l( O既然那人这么热心帮我指出来
( V2 p: ?4 u$ f6 w我就改改吧



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现在改成了，不知道对不对
# {: p4 _5 I/ k, y* ]6 p/ `$ G8 L" JAnother system to rule the people is a moral system. It is a completely flexible system, in comparison with the legal system.

In case that the laws became so flexible that they were keen to perfectly adapt each emerging situation, then the problem should arise with executability. The laws could be so fast reactive to the changing situation that people violated the law without consciousness and executors judged cases with out-of-date regulations.
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1 b4 f  Y3 \! b; B4 Z这一段虚拟也改了   也不知道对不对

我重新开个贴 让大家来拍砖吧

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In case that the laws became so flexible that they were keen to perfectly adapt each emerging situation, then the problem should arise with executability. The laws could be so fast reactive to the cha ...
Anonymous 发表于 2009-9-16 12:58

0 ~6 T1 v) u0 Q6 p# N7 RI am uncomfortable with
"in case that..., then"
"the laws became so flexible that they were keen to "
"the problem ... with executability"

Of course, I am not a native speaker.

Once a rigid and fixed law comes into force, the society can immediately reach a consensus,
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% c  l; u% Q& a8 bIn principle, a law comes into force after a consensus has been reached.
+ F- x7 h8 S) c1 f# ]5 D6 |1 w" u' ]吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-16 12:49

恩    但是法律通过不需要100%的投票率啊

: N3 k) I: k; v5 ?% {我是想表达  有了法律，你就算不满意 也要遵守。  不知道consensus换成什么比较好

So, you'd better rephrase them.
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I am uncomfortable with
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"the problem ... with executability"
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: S6 A: e. S2 E0 _+ ~" o( o+ z" y! j$ ^Of course, I am not a native speaker.
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7 ^6 Q6 H3 w9 j  d, t, k你是说就keen用的不好
还是"in case that..., then"
% R/ ?: Q- n- _3 q  r* w8 K"the laws became so flexible that they were keen to "
"the problem ... with executability"这3个都不好
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keen我改成tend to了，你觉得怎么样

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因为我的确不重视冠词的使用  用法也不一定清楚
冠词在我文章中都是爱写不写的
既然那人这么热心帮我指出来
我就改改吧
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现在改成了，不知道对不对
Another system  ...
  B. C+ w0 M4 \' }Anonymous 发表于 2009-9-16 12:56

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I am not sure. If I were you, I would use "the" in place of "a".

吃花生的大灰狼

你是说就keen用的不好
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1 G1 [. _* \/ g8 a. |/ ~6 A' d"the laws became so flexible that they were keen to "
& w- j$ C! l# b/ C' V"the problem ... with executability"这3个都不好
Anonymous 发表于 2009-9-16 13:11

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9 I0 G; I4 ~6 P: m6 c' |# kAll those three points make me confused.

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By the way, I think it should be "adapt to sth"

By the way, I think it should be "adapt to sth"
吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-16 13:17

8 c% _& E0 S8 b: t7 C5 ?改好了