英语写作中级提高技巧：给参加与不参加我口语培训的朋友们的礼物(2)漂亮长句

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区别简短与简洁：
写作时非常强调简洁，但简洁绝对不代表要你写一大堆简单句。英语本来是一个比较单调的东西，缺少了句式的变化，写作出来的东西只会显得松散而且显得缺少写作技巧。适当的要把握好长短句结合的写作，以求文章读起来比较适合读者。


1)        People and places changes as well. Tim felt it strongly. He had been away for many years.

Change: On returning after a long term /many years, Tim had a strong feeling of how people and places change.

2)        Susan graduated last summer. She joined the First Super Group in Singapore soon after graduation and received an engineering degree from her college.

Change a :  After graduating last summer with an engineering degree, Susan soon joined the First Super Group in Singapore.

Change b : An engineering degree-holder, Susan joined the First Super Group in Singapore last summer soon after graduation.

Or : change c: Having graduated with an engineering degree, Susan joined the First Super Group in Singapore last summer.

这里就要讲讲一点小的变化技巧：我们中国人习惯于用who, that, which之类的定语从句，但不习惯用以上例2中的用法。2 b号中用到了一个是介词结构加主语加谓语 的用法。很多时候请在写句子时，都要想想你的几个简单句根据逻辑结构是不是能变化一下，以此来代替。

2C则是用到了状语从句，加主语，加谓语的写法。这种写法的好处就是，having作为伴随状语起到独立主格结构的作用，避免了用after（我们中国人最喜欢就是用AFTER来写句子，对不？不怪自己没学，是老师没教更好的写法而已）的从句。大家有机会请无论如何要仔细品味一下2B与2C的写法。

留个小作业吧，有兴趣的请继续跟写。请尽量将下面句子合并。
1)        Snow White did her chores with a smile. Often she would sing while she worked.
2)        Memory is one of those abilities that we take for granted except when it fails us. So, memory is like digestion in this way (去掉SO，注意，so也是写作时尽量避免的)
3)        Linda sat there. Her beautiful coat was still wrapped around her against the cold

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